My Writing

My Writing

Today I am looking at my progress in writing.
Not so great:
i was doing job and i was up into after twelve at night it was really tired.

Great writing:

He is in a plane and he will be jumping out his name is Jrae, and he is going to save the world,  he is going to land in australia.  he is working for the army.

He will lead everyone to safety and he is going to come to 200 and 100 meters to the ground.

and he will do everything to save the world. he is cool. it is going to put on a parachute and he is  a super hero and superhero doesn't need a cape to be a hero. but he is wearing an army suit. he does have children too, and i am going to bike to his house's too and he will have fun with his family. and he is a hero to hos family.

my good writing:

The quality

My not great writing:

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